I love the consonance. I read this out loud a couple of times, and I really love the way that the first two lines sound. The only suggestion I would have to make would be the words "look" and "back". They just sound a bit weird when I read them out loud and together. It could just be me? Try reading them out and tell me what you think,
Mhmm, I see what you mean sort of, with the "k" sound at the end of each I think is what's causing it. Hmm...I think I'll leave this one alone since it's already up but I will be more wary in the future ! (:
I love the consonance. I read this out loud a couple of times, and I really love the way that the first two lines sound. The only suggestion I would have to make would be the words "look" and "back". They just sound a bit weird when I read them out loud and together. It could just be me? Try reading them out and tell me what you think,
ReplyDeleteMhmm, I see what you mean sort of, with the "k" sound at the end of each I think is what's causing it. Hmm...I think I'll leave this one alone since it's already up but I will be more wary in the future ! (:
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